2011年6月1日 星期三

Express an opinion - 1

    Is that using nuclear power to sole the energy crisis a right thing? I don’t think so. In my opinion, nuclear power has a lot of danger of unsure factor. You can’t know when the danger will happen. I think the best ensample is The 2011 Tahoka earthquake. The earthquake leads Fukushima Nuclear Power Plants radiate divergence when it hit Japan. This happened make us to face this problem. After German to resist and oppose, the Nuclear Power Plants never emerge from their dominion. After all, they have a lot of energy alternative which can use. To save a good earth that we can make this world more wonderful.
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  1. 靖苡2011年6月1日 晚上11:08

    第三行ensample → example 網路說ensample是古字XD?

    The earthquake leads Fukushima Nuclear Power Plants radiate divergence when it hit Japan. This happened make us to face this problem.
    為過去事實唷
    一句兩動詞欸＠＠ → Fukushima Nuclear Power Plants radiated divergence when the earthquake hit Japan, which made us face this problem. 這樣應該比較好:)

    在這一句之前我覺得寫的都很棒，可是這一句以後你在寫什麼勒＠＠＠＠＠！！？離題嗎? 為什麼會有德國？前面句子都很好文法也沒什麼錯，卻在這一句以後好嚇人xD
    我想睡覺的時候也會做出這種事情欸xDD

    後面要改唷 ~

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  2. 佳穎2011年6月1日 晚上11:36

    Is that using nuclear power to sole the energy crisis a right thing? sole 是不是改save?或是solve 你拼錯了唷~
    This happened make us to face this problem.
    this happened怪怪的 改成this affair如何?(這件事)
    還有make記得加s～
    After German to resist and oppose.這句不用加to喔 還有要用過去式~是說為神麼突然跑出德國:))好好笑xd

    To save a good earth that we can make this world more wonderful. 這句文法錯喔~要改~!!
    可改成in order to keep our earth from danger, we should~怎樣怎樣的～

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  3. 珍儀2011年6月1日 晚上11:39

    Is that using nuclear power to sole the energy crisis a right thing?
    -->that是加s+v所以直接去掉就好囉
    --> Is using nuclear power to sole the energy crisis a right thing?

    factor
    --> factors

    ensample是過去的寫法耶~~
    用過去的寫法寫現代文章~我覺得有點怪怪的
    (【古】=example)

    The earthquake leads Fukushima Nuclear Power Plants radiate divergence when it hit Japan.
    -->The earthquake leads to Fukushima Nuclear Power Plants radiate divergence when it hit Japan.

    This happened make us to face this problem.
    -->This incident makes us to face this problem.

    To save a good earth that we can make this world more wonderful.
    -->If we put more emphasis on environmental protection, we can make this world more wonderful.

    前面幾句還不錯但是後面還是要注意不要直翻喔

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  4. 爾雅2011年6月1日 晚上11:43

    第二行unsure factor 要加s喔 不只一個因素吧~~
    第四行The earthquake leads... 應該要用過去式led
    而且lead 後面是加結果 可是radiate 是動詞 要改一下
    後面的when it hit Japan.改成after it hit Japan比較好 畢竟地震發生跟輻射外洩不是同時發生...

    倒數第四行This happened make us to face this problem.
    也是出現兩個動詞了!!!
    既然this代表前面講的事 這句可以改成and that made us to face this problem.
    可以跟前面那句合併 然後也是要注意時態 是過去式~~~~

    最後...這句..After German to resist and oppose, the Nuclear Power Plants never emerge from their dominion. 感覺像是突然跳出來的 跟前後文連不上
    and that's all~

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  5. XUAN (13)2011年6月1日 晚上11:52

    solve打錯囉

    factor要加s

    This happened make us to face this problem
    這句話完全錯誤喔
    你可以說
    It happened and made us face the serious problem

    跟樓上那些人想的差不多
    有進步~但後面看不太懂xd

    盡量不要上網查字典找一些我們自己都不知道的單字
    因為考英檢的時候是沒有字典讓你找的喔

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  6. 惠芳2011年6月4日 清晨5:33

    sole是slove喔~

    unsure factor要加s喔=)

    This happened make us to face this problem.
    這句怪怪的= =
    The incident makes us to think about the problem.比較好喔!!!

    After German to resist and oppose,
    這句有點看不懂~

    To save a good earth that we can make this world more wonderful.
    可改成
    To do something good to save the earth and make it becomes more and more beautiful.

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  7. 玲儀2011年6月5日 凌晨2:05

    I don’t think so.
    >>>這句可以用老師給的講義上面的寫法會更好喔:>

    In my opinion, nuclear power has a lot of danger of unsure factor.
    >>>
    In my opinion, nuclear power has a lot of danger for some unsure factors.
    這樣比較順喔 :>

    The earthquake leads Fukushima Nuclear Power Plants radiate divergence when it hit Japan.
    >>>是lead ~ to
    The earthquake leads Fukushima Nuclear Power plants to rasiate divergence whe it hit Japan.

    This happened make us to face this problem.
    >>>make us face
    make + 人 + V-ing

    After German to resist and oppose, the Nuclear Power Plants never emerge from their dominion.
    >>>這句不合文法喔!
    你是要寫得國人的援助幫助了日本不在受到災害的迫害嗎???


    很多用詞有誤喔!
    單字的用法要多多注意
    句子和句子之間的連貫性也要注意
    (有時候上下句不太相關喔)

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  8. 曉芸2011年6月9日 晚上8:16

    Is that using nuclear power to sole the energy crisis a right thing?(Is using~to solve)

    In my opinion, nuclear power has a lot of danger of unsure factor.(factors)

    I think the best ensample is The 2011 Tahoka earthquake.(I ~the representative exampleis~)用代表比較好~用best感覺有種幸災樂禍的感覺XD

    ~happened make us to face this problem.(event /incident make us to face the music)
    After German to resist and oppose, (~German decides to ~)

    After all, they have a lot of energy alternative which can use.(~alternatives that we can use)

    To save a good earth that we can make this world more wonderful.(The best way to remain a good earth is that we should~)你寫的這個結尾怪怪的~而且文法也不對~要注意喔><

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  9. 椿茱2011年6月14日 清晨6:13

    1st 我會這樣改-> Is it a right thing to use nuclear power to solve the energy crisis?
    I don’t think so. 這具放在文章裡斯乎不太恰當欸 因為畢竟是寫文章嘛:D
    2nd nuclear power has a lot of danger of unsure factor.
    -> nuclear power has a lot of uncertain dangerous factors.
    You can’t know when the danger will happen.
    -> You can’t predict what will happen.
    3rd ensample用原來的example比較優:D
    The 2011 Tahoka earthquake是不是打錯了Tahoka在美國欸!
    The earthquake leads Fukushima Nuclear Power~~ -> leads可以改成trigger作”引起”
    4th This happened make us to face this problem這句話用來銜接怪怪的欸
    可以改成This tragedy raises our awareness of ~
    你寫德國的那邊怪怪的喔 據我所知 他們是說在20XX年之前 停止所有的核能發電
    a lot of energy alternative which can use. -> a lot of usable alternatives
    6th To save a good earth that we can make this world more wonderful. 其實我看不太懂欸
    -> All we can do to save the earth is ~~
    注意喔!! 寫進文章的資訊是否正確:D

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