I have a professional specialist. It is painting. I have studied it almost 9 years. I always drawing picture in my free time and go to see art exhibitions. I also interests in writing. I have won two literary awards in the junior and senior high schools since I love reading all sorts of books. Thus I have an attempt to write my own absorbing works.
I regard that my personality is enthusiastic and amicable. I always do my best in helping people. Therefore, I participated in service activities from hospital and library. It was a great experience for me to give service to others. In the hospital, when I saw the person ill and hurt, I would glad my parent gave me a healthy body.
"I just think that life cannot be made so simply." As Rabindranath Tagore wrote, I firmly believed that life is a perpetual surprise. Every creature was made with dignity, and all living things had their own way to live. So, I am respected and open-minded to everyone.
畫畫好像不適用study耶~
回覆刪除你可以說practice painting skills
而且要用has been practicing比較好
an attempt to -->in attempt to
I have a professional specialist=>specialistg是專家的意思~用ability或者是skill我覺得會比較正確
回覆刪除I always drawing picture in my free time and go to see art exhibitions.=>~draw~and appreciate(觀賞)~
I also interests in writing.=>I am also interested in ~
Thus I have an attempt to write my own absorbing works=>attempt我覺得有點殺傷力~thus I hope one day I can create my own works.
Therefore, I participated in service activities from hospital and library=>~the hospital and the library
It was a great experience for me to give service to others=>~to the society
I would glad my parent gave me a healthy body.=>I am thankful to my parents for giving me such a healthly body.
最後一段感覺很優美只是跟你so後面的東西有點不太搭~我覺得你的最後最後一句話可以改的更符合你前面那幾句會比較完整~
其他的我覺得架構還滿清楚的~^^
I have a professional specialist.
回覆刪除-我有一個專業的專家??
It is painting.
-我看過lily的圖喔 :> 真害羞XD
I have studied it almost 9 years.
-...for almost ..
I always drawing picture in my free time and go to see art exhibitions.
-I alway draw picture in ...
Thus I have an attempt to write my own absorbing works.
-這句前後文連接起來怪怪的
I always do my best in helping people.
-I always do my best to ...
It was a great experience for me to give service to others.
-serve others