As for my future, I plan to enter a great college with the beautiful environment, professional teachers and wonderful facilities. The great college I have been longing for. The Department of Foreign Language in my high school offers all kinds of English-related courses, which will help me enhance my English ability. Moreover, I have been keeping watching for information of the school from predecessors and teachers. Knowing the evaluation of the school where has many resources to reach my goal. After enter this college, I have some objective want to achieve. First of all, I want to pass the High-intermediate of GEPT, IELTS and TOEFL. Prepare for that, I will study hard and make more efforts to sharpen my English, especially my English listening and speaking abilities. Second, I would also like to learn Japanese. Though I often take poor grades of Japanese in my High School life, I will spend much time studying Japanese and have a good command of it. The last not the least is take my college life be colorful and fantastic. I really hope that I can be admitted to this university.
The great college I have been longing for.
回覆刪除-->This is the great college I have been longing for.
The Department of Foreign Language in my high school offers all kinds of English-related courses, which will help me enhance my English ability. 這具後半段應該要用過去式喔
Knowing the evaluation ?知道預估?
have some objective want to achieve--> have some objective wanting to achieve
Knowing the evaluation of the school where has many resources to reach my goal這一句話你後面鬥號還要再加一句~不然不是完整的句子喔~evaluation放在這邊很怪~你是要講aspect之類的嗎??
回覆刪除I have some objective want to achieve=>~objective that I would like to ~
First of all, I want to pass the High-intermediate of GEPT, IELTS and TOEFL=>IELTS and TOEFL有最高等級嗎??他們不是只有分數最高幾分而已
嗎??你可能要在查一下喔!!
Prepare for that, I will study hard and make more efforts to sharpen my English=>In order to prepare~
Though I often take poor grades of Japanese in my High School life,=>這句話很像是缺點~我覺得你可以改成though studying Japanese is a hard task for me ~
I will spend much time studying Japanese and have a good command of it. =>~having~
The last not the least is take my college life be colorful and fantastic. =>the last but not the least is to make my college more
最後的結尾我覺得有點短~可拉長增加豐富度
The great college I have been longing for.
回覆刪除- for 後面要接受詞
Moreover, I have been keeping watching for information of the school from predecessors and teachers.
-不確定watch for可不可以這樣用
Knowing the evaluation of the school where has many resources to reach my goal.
-這具的文法有點怪
After enter this college, I have some objective want to achieve.
-objective可以改成goal比較好
First of all, I want to pass the High-intermediate of GEPT, IELTS and TOEFL.
-IELTS TOEFL 好像沒有最高級?
Prepare for that, I will study hard and make more efforts to sharpen my English, especially my English listening and speaking abilities.
-Preparing for that,...make every efforts...
Though I often take poor grades of Japanese in my High School life, I will spend much time studying Japanese and have a good command of it.
-get poor grades..., I will spend much time studying ...and having ....
The last not the least is take my college life be colorful and fantastic.
-一句有兩個動詞是 last but not the least