I am Yi-Ping. Lily is my English name. On April 16, 1994, I was born to a middle-class family. Now, I am 18 years old, studying in National Tainan commercial vocational high school. I come from a very happy middle class family. My mother works in a Tobacco & Liquor Corporation. She always tell me how to let things more system. My father died in 2002. After that, my mother take cares of me when I was young. I am not the so-called spoiled child. I do my best to be considering my mother’s hard. Spend all and after to let her know that I can handle every things as I can. I really appreciate of her.
Lily:D～
回覆刪除National Tainan commercial vocational high school-->National Tainan commercial vocational senior high school.
let things more system-->let things be more system
my mother take cares of me when I was young.-->
my mother takes cares of me when I was young.
I do my best to be considering my mother’s hard.-->
I do my best to be considering my mother’s toil(辛苦).
Spend all and after 這句我看不懂>__<
I am Yi-Ping=>我覺得你可以把姓加上去，感覺會比較正式=)
回覆刪除She always tell me how to let things more system.這句文法有怪=>she always teach me how to manage my life orderly.Therefore,~
I do my best to be considering my mother’s hard.=>I do my best to show understanding for~
Spend all and after to let her know that I can handle every things as I can.=>Also, I make great efforts handling everything on my own in order to let her knoe that I am a responsible person.
I really appreciate of her=>of 不用
I am Yi-Ping. Lily is my English name. On April 16, 1994, I was born to a middle-class family.
回覆刪除-born to or born in 可以查查看
She always tell me how to let things more system.
-tells me~
After that, my mother take cares of me when I was young.
-my mother took care of me when I was young.
I am not the so-called spoiled child. I do my best to be considering my mother’s hard. Spend all and after to let her know that I can handle every things as I can. I really appreciate of her.
-有些句子有點怪怪的喔:>
不過我肯定lily是個體貼的乖小孩
加油:>
middle class應避免重複喔
回覆刪除lily好董事喔>_<