2011年5月18日 星期三

Contrasting - 2

I am hiring a new English teacher instructor for my school. One day, I took two resumes from people applying for the job. To hire an English teacher for junior high school is very difficult. Two of them are wonderful. But I just need to choose one. Debra has more education than Lynn. But Lynn learned other language more than Debra. They also took award in past. I am mired in difficulties. Finally, I chose Debra Fines to be our school’s teacher. Because Debra has more employment experience than Lynn has. I think she can use her experience to teach our students.
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  1. 惠芳2011年5月20日 上午8:58

    I am hiring a new English teacher instructor for my school.
    這裡不用teacher和instructor都放~
    因為是差不多的意思!!!

    To hire an English teacher for junior high school is very difficult.
    這句和上句不太接~
    可以補充個句子!
    再把這句簡化!
    Due to those two people have different experiences.So I think it's hard for me to decide.

    比較的部分不太足夠~
    下次可以嘗試都寫進來=)

    I think she can use her experience to teach our students.
    這句怪怪的~
    I think she can use her professional experience to improve our students' abilities.

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  2. 佳穎2011年5月22日 清晨6:25

    時態要一樣喔!
    support句子的內容可以多加一點喔~

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  3. 珍儀2011年5月25日 晚上10:46

    But Lynn learned other language more than Debra.
    -->But Lynn learned more other languages than Debra.

    They also took award in past.
    -->They were also awarded many prizes in the past.

    時態一直變換唷~~要統一

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  4. 靖苡2011年5月25日 晚上11:16

    English instructor 就好唷~

    It is very difficult to hire an English instructor because both of them are wonderful.
    But I just need to choose one. 這句怪怪
    要馬just不要→ But I need to choose one.
    要馬改成→ But I just need one.

    開始的好突然可以加個副詞，ex: First of all, Debra has more education than Lynn, but Lynn learned ( other → more ) languages〞 ( more不要 ) than Debra.

    They ( also → both ) took award in (少了the )past.

    I am mired in difficulties. 這一句你翻成中文會變成: 我陷入困境中在困難方面＠超怪＠?
    in difficulties可以不要吧? 可是這樣會很短- 口-

    → Finally, I chose Debra Fines to be our English instructor because she has more employment experience than Lynn.

    → I think she can teach our students well. 這樣就好

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  5. 椿茱2011年5月29日 凌晨1:26

    第一句和第二句的時態不一樣很奇怪
    I am hiring a new English teacher instructor for my school.One day, I took two resumes from people applying for the job.
    ->Several weeks ago, I had published a notice to hire a new English instructor for my school. And so far, I have received two resumes from those who feel like assuming the position.

    Two of them are wonderful. But I just need to choose one.
    -> Two of them are wonderful, but I have to choose best one to the vacancy.

    They also took award in past. -> 只有Lynn有吧

    I am mired in difficulties. -> In order to make the decision, I find myself in the mire. After pondering the problem for a long time,

    比較過程中要多多注意用字及語意的順暢度呢!

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  6. 爾雅2011年5月29日 清晨7:45

    第一行 English teacher instructor
    寫English instructor就好了

    可以多寫一些為什麼要選Debra的理由
    這樣文章才不會那麼短

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  7. 玲儀2011年6月1日 晚上11:34

    To hire an English teacher for junior high school is very difficult.
    >>>Hiring an English teacher for junior high school is very difficult for both of them are qualitied.

    可以寫多一點為何選擇此人的原因

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  8. 玲儀2011年6月1日 晚上11:34

    還有記得時態要一致

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  9. 曉芸2011年6月1日 晚上11:54

    One day, I took two resumes from people applying for the job. (took-received)
    To hire an English teacher for junior high school is very difficult.(~difficult as a result of two of the applicants are too wonderful)
    But Lynn learned other language more than Debra.(~learned more language than~)
    They also took award in past. I am mired in difficulties. (~in the past~am admired~)
    寫的有點短~可以再加長文章長度~

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