Two sports I enjoy that are similar to each other. I enjoy playing tennis and volley ball. They have very the same place to each other. Tennis is a ball game and which make use of hand a lot. Otherwise, volley ball is also need to use hand. Both of they have a net for ball game between one team and the other team. When you play tennis, you must to sweep racket to pass ball. It is just like volley ball. But they have a different place. Playing volley ball doesn’t use racket. The most important, you can’t lead ball fell down the ground. All you need to do is lead the ball pass to other place.
Two sports I enjoy that are similar to each other=>There are two sports, which I enjoy to play, are similar to each other.
回覆刪除First, I enjoy playing tennis and volley ball. They have very the same place to each other. =>the very same~會比較順
Tennis is a ball game and which make use of hand a lot.=>~and it needs to use hands to play.
Otherwise, volley ball is also need to use hand.=>~ball needs to use hands, too. Both of they have a net for ball game between one team and the other team.=>both of them have a net for a ball game between one team to the other one.
When you play tennis, you must to sweep racket to pass ball. =>muse sweep~
It is just like volley ball.=>balls
But they have a different place. Playing volley ball doesn’t use racket. The most important, you can’t lead ball fell down the ground.=>~let
All you need to do is lead the ball pass to other place.=>to another place
結論句要加會比較完整喔!!
Two sports I enjoy that are similar to each other.
回覆刪除前方是要加上There are才對喔~
There are two sports, which I really enjoy , are similar to each other.
I enjoy playing tennis and volley ball.
因為前句有enjoy所以這可改為
There are tennis and volley ball.
Both of they have a net for ball game between one team and the other team.
是Both of them have a net between one team and the other team. 才對喔!
But they have a different place.
這句話會跟主題衝突到喔~
因為是comparing所以要比一樣的=)
最後的句子感覺沒有下文!
應該多補充結論句~
Two sports I enjoy that are similar to each other. 這句THAT可以省略喔 比較順~
回覆刪除They have very the same place to each other.
應該是THE VERY SAME PLACE
Tennis is a ball game and which make use of hand a lot. 這個..TENNIS是物體，所以不能利用手喔，MAKE USE OF是利用的意思呢~
Otherwise, volley ball is also need to use hand
OTHERWISE跟後麵得ALSO矛盾了喔
一改成SIMILARLY~
Both of they -->THEM
you can’t lead ball fell down the ground
LEAD--->LET
結論句可以多加一句喔!!
Two sports I enjoy that are similar to each other.
回覆刪除-->Two sports that I enjoy doing are similar to each other.
volley ball是連在一起的唷
They have very the same place to each other.
-->There are many ways that are the same between tennis and volleyball.
Tennis is a ball game and which make use of hand a lot.
-->Tennis is a ball game, which makes us use our hands .
Otherwise, volley ball is also need to use hand.
Otherwise,是否則唷~
-->likewise, volleyball also needs to use our hands most of time.
But they have a different place.
-->But there are some differences between them.
The most important, you can’t lead ball fell down the ground.
-->The most important thing is that you can’t let ball fall down.
→ Tennis and volley ball are both my favorite sports and they are similar to each other. 這樣會比較順
回覆刪除They have very the same place to each other.(這句好多餘)
→ Tennis is a ball game which is played with our hands. Otherwise, volley ball also have to use our hands.
Both of them have a net between one team and the other team through a ball game.
But they have a different place. 不可以在這篇文章中出現這種不相關的句子唷!
所以我幫你改成…→ The most important, when you play tennis, you can not let the ball fall down the ground All you need to do is let the ball pass to the net.
It is just like volley ball. 這句我覺得很棒
Two sports I enjoy that>>Two sports I enjoy a ball game and which >> a ball game which
回覆刪除is also need to use >> needs to use
Two sports I enjoy that are similar to each other. I enjoy playing tennis and volley ball.They have very the same place to each other.
回覆刪除each other 我不知道可不可用在除了人以外
-> I enjoy playing tennis and volley ball, and which of them are similar in many way.
Tennis is a ball game and which make use of hand a lot.
-> Tennis is a kind of the ball game, which could develop our arms.
Both of they have a net for ball game between one team and the other team. -> 這句怪怪的 是中文吧
When you play tennis, you must to sweep racket to pass ball.
->When you play tennis, you must hit a ball backwards and forwards across a net with a racket
It is just like volley ball-> 除了擊球過網其他都不一樣吧
The most important -> Most important of all
you can’t lead ball fell down the ground這句接在這裡怪怪的欸 因為你這段已經開始說這兩種運動不同的地方了, 但這點卻使兩者的相同處 這樣很矛盾呢
最後應該再加一句當作結論句喔!
這篇的錯誤比較多一點喔 要更加注意才行:D
建議你在做比較的時候 先確定你要比較的東西的不同處相似處究竟有幾點比較好 加油喽~~
第一行Two sports I enjoy that are similar to each other. I enjoy playing tennis and volley ball.
回覆刪除可以合併成 Tennis and volleyball are the two sports which I enjoy.
而且Two sports I enjoy that are similar to each other.跟They have very the same place to each other. 這2句的意思有點像
第三行 volley ball is also need to use hand
hand加s比較好喔 打排球不只用到一隻手~~
整篇文章的長度再增加一些會更好喔
Two sports I enjoy that are similar to each other.
回覆刪除>>>Two sports that I enjoy the most are similar to each other.
I enjoy playing tennis and volley ball.
>>>I enjoy playing tennis as well as volley ball.
Tennis is a ball game and which make use of hand a lot.
>>>這具不合文法喔
Otherwise, volley ball is also need to use hand.
>>>一個句子裡面不能有兩個動詞
Both of they have a net for ball game between one team and the other team.
>>>Both of them have a net
It is just like volley ball.
>>> It is just what the same as volley ball.
But they have a different place.
>>>>But they have a lot of differences
全文可以家些連接詞
有些句子的意思有點表達的不清楚